Everyday millions of people all over the world put on an outfit when they wake up. For some, their ensemble expresses their personality, for others their creativity can only go as far as what’s allowed at school or work. While some of these people only look at a shirt as a shirt, and navy blue pants no different from black pants, what they don’t realize is the industry they are contributing to. This industry has in fact been around for centuries, believably considered to have originated in England. Since the early nineteenth century it has been carried over to America first only as a textile industry, not creating the apparel portion until almost the twentieth century. As both industries merged into one, it continuously grew, forming the term “designer,” which was developed from apprentices who were taught pattern making. During the 1950’s and 60’s, fashion had become so huge, that trends were not just popping up one at a time, but multiple at a time. Designers all over the world were gaining recognition, taking the industry to a higher level in a very short time. Soon there were more than just designers, the fashion world consisted of retailer, buyers, pattern makers, tailors, and seamstresses. Towards the beginning of the twenty-first century the fashion industry was a competitive business seeking out fresh and new designs every second. As knowledge about this grew, so did the want of many young individuals to be a part of this world. One of the few problems that arose was the lack of preparation many newcomers possessed.
Do I have an interesting enough beginning?
6 comments:
Not a lot of people write about this topic. You pick a good topic and it is something that you know a lot about. It is very interesting and good start.
Your introduction is well written and very descriptive. It is also an interesting topic to write and read about.
It is a good start, its just a plain statement but it does do a good job of grabbing the readers attention. You might want to shorten the whole thing down a little and save some of the info for your body paragraph.
Krista, I like how you connect the act of getting dressed, which everyone can relate to, to the behind the scenes industry that not many people know about. Maybe to make the connection clearer you can say something about how people have been making wardrobe decisions for a long time; that might make the connection to the long history of the fashion industry a little clearer.
I do think you try to get too much into your introduction and you might be better served to save some of that more historical detail for some of your body paragraphs.
Your introuduction is very well wriiten and very informative and descriptive. It is good to write about something that most people know nothing about and never wrtie about.
Your introuduction is very well wriiten and very informative and descriptive. It is good to write about something that most people know nothing about and never wrtie about.
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