tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5991236979902583474.post2057152391612451183..comments2008-01-11T05:32:10.435-08:00kristanoreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5991236979902583474.post-39230712012686928092008-01-11T05:32:00.001-08:002008-01-11T05:32:00.001-08:00Your introuduction is very well wriiten and very informative and descriptive. It is good to write about something that most people know nothing about and never wrtie about.Allyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07116876925655477360noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5991236979902583474.post-47436225029030818922008-01-11T05:32:00.000-08:002008-01-11T05:32:00.000-08:00Your introuduction is very well wriiten and very informative and descriptive. It is good to write about something that most people know nothing about and never wrtie about.Allyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07116876925655477360noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5991236979902583474.post-20550782778006686852008-01-10T18:34:00.000-08:002008-01-10T18:34:00.000-08:00Krista, I like how you connect the act of getting dressed, which everyone can relate to, to the behind the scenes industry that not many people know about. Maybe to make the connection clearer you can say something about how people have been making wardrobe decisions for a long time; that might make the connection to the long history of the fashion industry a little clearer.<BR/><BR/>I do think you try to get too much into your introduction and you might be better served to save some of that more historical detail for some of your body paragraphs.Millerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05517958038962746348noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5991236979902583474.post-47546656179282827172008-01-10T05:46:00.000-08:002008-01-10T05:46:00.000-08:00It is a good start, its just a plain statement but it does do a good job of grabbing the readers attention. You might want to shorten the whole thing down a little and save some of the info for your body paragraph.Zackushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13124681405323673968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5991236979902583474.post-82644863038237779522008-01-09T09:03:00.000-08:002008-01-09T09:03:00.000-08:00Your introduction is well written and very descriptive. It is also an interesting topic to write and read about.Shereehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10358073086890363995noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5991236979902583474.post-62189082612878762722008-01-09T05:45:00.000-08:002008-01-09T05:45:00.000-08:00Not a lot of people write about this topic. You pick a good topic and it is something that you know a lot about. It is very interesting and good start.Jillianhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16160511948998168013noreply@blogger.com